Tuesday, March 9, 2010

Tough Struggle

Everyone faces struggles and obstacles in life when trying to reach a goal. Some are minor speed bumps and others are mountains people have to climb over. People face struggles and obstacles in a variety of aspects of their life. They can be from trying to earn enough money to buy a new ipod or struggling in academic classes in school. These struggles are unrelated but a challenge all the same. In The Old Man and the Sea, the main character, Santiago faces struggles and obstacles in his fight to land the great marlin he has hooked. The marlin’s shear size was a main obstacle. The attacking sharks created mayhem for Santiago. Also his cut and cramped hand had an effect on his abilities of reeling in the fish. He has to over come obstacles in this story to succeed in making money off this fish.

Santiago has to overcome the cramping in his hand he gets. This cramp is so terrible it completely disables the use of the hand. He now has to hold on to the fish with one hand." What kind of a hand is that" he said "cramp if you want it will do you no good."(58) This doesn’t allow him to do anything else. Santiago now can’t eat or try and catch a fish on another line because he has to maintain all his strength in clinging onto the fish. He has to suffer from lack of food and the lose of a whole arms strength. He overcomes this obstacle by rubbing his hand on his leg to take out the knots. While Santiago is doing this he is maintaining concentration on holding on to the fish and reacting to its changes in swimming pattern.

The sheer size of the fish created an obstacle all its own. "The man pulled on him all that he could to bring him closer. For just a moment the fish turned a little on his side.”(91) Santiago had to physically pull the 1500 pound fish to the side of the boat on his own. For a man who seems to be about 80 years old this is a tremendous feat to over come. Could you imagine the strain on your fatigued muscle? This old man dragged the enormous fish through the water. Even though he isn’t as strong,he was determined to catch the fish. Determination enabled him to catch the fish.

The mako sharks attack when they smell blood of the fish in the water. "The shark closed fast astern and when he hit the fish the old man saw his mouth open and his strange eyes and the click chop of the teeth as he drove forward in the meat just above the tail."(101)The old man is ill prepared for the fight ahead of him. He has his harpoon which he soon loses and then breaks his knife not long after that. He continues in his fight against the sharks to save the meat of the prized marlin he has just caught. Now you might be thinking if sharks came after my fish I wouldn’t bother trying to fight them off because its just one fish. Yes, I know it is just one fish but when looking through the old man’s eyes you see more than just one fish. You see the biggest, most magnificent marlin he has every seen and he just caught it. In 86 days he has not caught a fish and with this beautiful creature he has ended his unlucky streak and will be able to sell the fish for a lot of money. Fighting off mako sharks became an obstacle when he chose to fight them he didn’t have to, but he felt the need to.

From fighting through pain, to conquering the fish and taking mako sharks head on this man fought many obstacles. He felt the need to go through mountains rather than take the detour. By taking this path in life he challenged himself and came out on top sometimes and fell short at other times. Although when you look back on it he never once gave up or got discouraged. He kept his head up and pushed through the tough times.

9 comments:

  1. The essays thesis is everyone has struggles and obstacles in everyday life that they have to get over. It is focused and it does engage me because it is well thought out and described.
    The first quote because it is the only one in the story so far. It made it stand out because it showed the old man and how he killed the fish.
    The word choice i think is the strong point in this essay. Max used a lot of big words."While Santiago is doing this he is maintaining concentration on holding on to the fish and reacting to its changes in swimming pattern." That just seems like good word choice.
    A weak point would be the conjunctions. Just read over it again and he should be fine. Nice job mate.

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  2. . The thesis is that the Old Man faces many obstacles such as the size of the marlin, his hand cramps, and the sharks. The thesis does engage me and is very clear. Max draws me in by talking about obstacles. “For just a moment the fish turned a little on his side.”(91) This is the best quote Max has because it is the only one in his story. It stood alone from the others because in reality it was alone. I think Max’s conclusion was very well. Also, his organization was very good with clear paragraphs with good detail. “From fighting through pain, to conquering the fish and taking mako sharks head on this many fought many obstacles.” I thought this was a very good start to his conclusion. I think the weakest part of his essay were the quotes. He only uses one so he should use more. Good job Max!

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  3. 1. The thesis of the essay is that the old man had to face struggles like a cramping hand, the size of the marlin, and the sharks. Its clear and it engages me with its opening subject abot life.
    2. you didnt put in all your quotes so i cant really choose..but im sure youll put ones that support your reasons..
    3. I think the strongest part of your essay was the opening and closing paragraphs. The other ones arent weak but the end and opening was written very well.
    4. Your weak point would maybe be the quote part. You just need to add more quotes in and maybe read over for conventions..you did very good overall.

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  5. 1: the thesis is, Everyone faces struggles and obstacles in life when trying to reach a goal.the thesis is clear it is the first sentance in the essay it tells the reader what they will be expecting about the book and the strugles they will read about without giving away anything.
    2:there were no quotes that i saw but when you compared santiagos pain and his determine nation to catch the fish it grabed and infomed the reader about the differny obsticles santiago faced.
    3:you added alot of detail without giving alot away, i would addd more quotes to compared back to and support your argument.
    4:the conclusion


    good job maxwell

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  6. 1.The thesis is that the old man faces many obstacles just like anyone else would, including the size of the marlin, his hand cramping, and the sharks. I thought the thesis was very clear.
    2.You only included one quote in your essay, so I can't really decide which one is the best. I would definitely suggest adding a few more quotes.
    3.I think both your introduction and conclusion were strong points of your essay. The introduction grabs the readers attention well, and in the conclusion you did a good job of wrapping your essay up and drawing in all your main points.
    4.The weakest part is your lack of quotes, make sure to add more. Also, you should take one more read through and fix any convention errors.

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  7. 1: the thesis is, Everyone faces struggles and obstacles in life when trying to reach a goal.the thesis is clear it is the first sentance in the essay it tells the reader what they will be expecting about the book and the strugles they will read about without giving away anything.
    2:there were no quotes that i saw but when you compared santiagos pain and his determine nation to catch the fish it grabed and infomed the reader about the differny obsticles santiago faced.
    3:you added alot of detail without giving alot away, i would addd more quotes to compared back to and support your argument.
    4:the conclusion

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  8. I. The thesis is that Santiago must overcome obstacles in order to make money by fishing.

    II. You only have one quote and it could be incorperated better (especially because I didn't see starting quotations).

    III. You do a good job of providing insights into the thoughs of Santiago, and some of his thought proceses.

    IV. Your conclusion is really nice interms of wrapping up the evidence, but it doesn't broaden out to the introduction main topic.

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  9. 1. The essays thesis is the marlins size, the attacking sharks, and his sore hand are obstacles against Santiago. The thesis was pretty clear, and well stated.
    2. You only have one quote in your essay so i cant make a clear judgment. I would suggest adding more into the other paragraphs. The quote you had was explained well though.
    3. I really liked your intro paragraph. It had nice examples of obstacles that people face. I would make the thesis more clear, or concise.
    4. I would advice you to just look over your essay to find any grammar mistakes. Overall it was written well. I would also add more quotes.

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